Mega Sporting Events and the Influence on International Human Rights: A Positioning Case for Qatar.
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-The chapter needed an introduction and perhaps being split in two. It is very long so can easily be split to be two chapters. -there is a lack of direction in the chapter. There’s no introduction to set the shape, no links between sections to build a narrative and no real attempt to synthesise the review at the end into a research agenda or a set of questions as we bridge into the methodology. Without this, the chapter feels incomplete. There’s also a tendency to jump from point to point and sometimes repeat elements across different sub headings. -a need of a broader outline at the start of the coupling of events and public policy and vice versa. I’d be expecting to see more the opening chapters of Gayle’s Mcpherson’s Event Policy book (and the like) in those early stages.
-it jumps around a lot – the section on regional unity needs to be there but the cultural diplomacy/sport diplomacy for me should be a chapter in its own right. -Be careful with some sweeping statements such as that sport is an activity that results in the establishment of world peace. -the lack of criticality in the review reading the first half. This is addressed more in the second half but it illustrates the need for a stronger introduction and link sections as it just slowly morphed into this rather than feeling like a deliberate structural choice. -the need to finish the chapter with a summary that leads the reader into the methodology and what comes next.
Mega Sporting Events and the Influence on International Human Rights: A Positioning Case for Qatar